Introduction:

Grabber: Anecdote about a memory with my friends at the pony rides

Background Info: Youth commission looking for input about how to make Benicia a kid-friendly town

Thesis Statement: In order to make Benicia a better place for teens, we need to bring back the pony rides at the Farmer's Market.

Body Paragraph #1 - 1st reason (pro)

Topic Sentence: One of the reasons having pony rides downtown is such a good idea is because it provides a healthy outdoor experience for teens.

1. they get outside for an activity

• fresh air
• not in front of the TV or computer

2. they get to interact with animals

• become familiar with ponies
• can overcome fears of animals
• don't have to go all the way to the zoo

Body Paragraph #2 - 2nd reason (pro)

Topic Sentence: Another good reason to provide pony rides downtown is that it gives teens a place where they can have fun with their parents and friends.

1. do something fun with parents

• parents can walk around the circle with their teenager
• bonding moment

2. do something fun with friends

• shared activity
• take pictures
• memory that will last forever

Body Paragraph #3 - 3rd reason - address a counterargument (con)

Topic Sentence: Some people may say that the ponies are unsanitary and shouldn't be near the farmer's market, but this is not a valid concern.

1. ponies do not pose a health risk

• statement from Mrs. Simmons
• little handi-wipe packets can be given out so teens can wipe their hands before handling food

2. the pony waste can be used for compost to fertilize plants around Benicia

3. the pleasure they ponies will bring the young people of Benicia is worth the little bit of discomfort from a few extra flies

Conclusion:

Restate thesis in a new way to emphasize your position: Benicia will be a better place for teens if we give them another fun activity to do with their parents and friends.

Make a call to action - I urge the Youth Commission to recommend to the Benicia City Council to bring back pony rides to the weekly farmer's market.